The Lights – One by One

The following piece was written for Friday Fictioners by Rochelle Wisoff .

This piece represents my first entry into the Friday Fictioners photo prompt challenge with the aim to write a full story: beginning, middle, end.

I may have decided to start in the middle – oh well.

Please comment.

Please be kind.

Photo Prompt

I rattled the first shutter. It was locked.

“Help,” I screamed.

My footfalls echoed frantically from one shutter to the next. I tried the second – the third, but they too—remained firmly shut.

As I ran, I could hear the sounds of circuits tripping behind me. One by one – the lights tripped off.

They drove me forward, and before long, I reached the end of the corridor.

I turned around to see the darkness upon me.

Three lights.

Two lights.

I clung to the sound in my chest and the gasping of my breath.

“Help me,” I pleaded.

One light.


Explore your Fiction.

Love your Reality.


23 thoughts on “The Lights – One by One

  1. Whoa. Super suspenseful and written in such a way that the terror of the protagonist jumps off the screen. Well done!! And please consider a sequel in the future. I’d love to know if he/she makes it out alive!

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  2. Dear Nam,

    Welcome to Friday Fictioneers. You certainly took us down a tense corridor. Well done. I hope you’ll take the time to read a few other stories and leave comments. Interaction is the best part of our group.



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  3. I loved the line – “I clung to the sound in my chest and the gasping of my breath.” You played on everyone’s fear of the dark and the unknown. Great job.

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